Improve the sentence
Date: 4th Oct 2015 @ 9:31pm
Look at the sentence below, can you improve it?
Think about capital letters, full stops (other punctuation too), adding a prepositional clause, subordination, adverbs, verbs, fronted adverbials (comma), rule of three action and/or an independent clause (semi-colon).
I look forward to reading your work, have fun!
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ok miss Richardson
Max ran quietly, slowly down the street and then a huge amount of people crowded round and then it was loud, unrelaxing for Max
Max ran as quick as a flash down the street.
Max ran under a bridge. Exhausted, he ran after his dog, which he luckily found.
In slow motion, Max ran down a gigantic hill,looking for his dog(dongo), he was scared about losing dongo!
Max ran as fast as a cheetah dogging the obstacles,as time past Max began to grow tired
Max ran across the road carfully, then after he had cross the road the road had had a rush hour
kymlynne jean mcclew wrote:
Max ran as fast a lightening bolt, looking high and low by a canal for his beloved dog, thinking hopefully he would find him
Max ran on the the moon, slowly after an alien, with his camera.
Max ran across the old bridge that sat on the pond as fast as Usain bolt, he felt like he was running forever!
Hollie Mai Robinson wrote:
Max ran across the old bridge in the park (sitting on the lake) as fast as Usain Bolt. He felt like he had been running forever!